Poem: Forgetting

[alee_grrl]

I was feeling the need to write today. So I headed over to napowrimo to check out today's prompt. Turns out it was one that struck a cord. :) I liked the etheree format so much I decided to write another one. So here's my first poem in celebration of National Poetry Month.

Forgetting

Drift
away
memory.
Stop haunting me.
Why is it that I
can forget where I last
set my keys or a needed
word? The location of my car
eludes me. But you, you, are right there.
Always. Let go. Free me from your embrace.

Comments

[erika]

Your poem inspires in me two responses, both already written, one my own and another another's:

http://erika.dreamwidth.org/540601.html

http://www.poemhunter.com/poem/one-art/

[alee_grrl]

Both are fabulous responses. Thank you for sharing them with me.

In a way I feel like this poem needs a counterpoint poem as well. One that acknowledges that our memories, even the haunting ones, are important and valuable. Perhaps I will work on that one next. :)

[lilmoka]

I like the etheree format a lot, even if I still hasn't tried it yet <3

It's a lovely poem, it really resonates with me (where are my keys? Where's my glasses? Where's my head? ;P)

[lynnoconnacht]

Ooooh. That's a really nice format for this poem. ^-^ And apparently I'm still stuck in "give really short feedback" mode. :/ But I do like this. I like the way it builds up and the way the lines work with it. It's got a lovely stacato effect at the beginning and then it branches out into something a bit more fluid. It's a really lovely effect.

And the sentiment is such a powerful one. <3

[alee_grrl]

Any feedback is very much appreciated!

So glad you enjoyed this one. I've had a lot of fun playing with the etheree format. This one really worked great with that format.