Yes, I think that you have done a good job of creating a mood with simple words and images that really translate well. I don't think the poems themselves are tired, but the mood is tired. Nothing wrong with that, especially when that's what they are reflecting and representing.
I like to encourage creative expression, whatever the form. So if something strikes me, I try very hard to comment. Ie, you are welcome!
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Date: 2013-03-11 02:48 am (UTC)Yes, I think that you have done a good job of creating a mood with simple words and images that really translate well. I don't think the poems themselves are tired, but the mood is tired. Nothing wrong with that, especially when that's what they are reflecting and representing.
I like to encourage creative expression, whatever the form. So if something strikes me, I try very hard to comment. Ie, you are welcome!